http://duamuteffe.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] duamuteffe.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] a_sporking_rat 2014-03-03 08:48 pm (UTC)

Fair enough; he could be in the 30% of pale dudes who weren't done. I wish she'd just come out and say it though, so we had some idea what the hell she was trying to get at. I read it again and I can't for the life of me figure out where any of Nicky's bits are in relation to each other. I mean, the loose skin is on the edge of his groin? So, the tip? But it's below something else? And I just noticed that after the whole hardness under the softness thing comes right before she tells us that he's still soft. Wrinkly skin, hard underneath, below...something... - is she licking his kneecap? How is this supposed to be sexy to anyone when the reader can't even tell what's going on? "Five feet wide with mystery junk" is not the way to sell a character in what is supposed to be a serious book.
Also the image of hairy balls and no pubic hair on the belly or around the penis is hilarious to me for some reason. It's like Nicky has an Amish beard on his genitalia.

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