I'd like to see your characters :). The Anitaverse has so much potential, and LKH pissed it entirely away.
Anita talks about how some people just go down on others like a duty or chore
Um what. LKH seems to do this a lot, write about how people treat sex in X bad way but this penis treats it in Y good way. And the reader is obviously supposed to nod and think, "yes, LKH is right, people act like X!" But in every case I've seen, people in my life have never acted like X, so I end up thinking it's a hangup of LKH's.
He stops to tell Asher that "You taste close." Is that something you can actually taste? Precum, I guess, that's a thing, right?
Yeah, but it can happen any time, it doesn't necessarily mean a guy's about to come. "You feel close" or, better, "you sound close" would have made more sense. Though the line is entirely IKEA and shouldn't have been said anyway.
As for Micah getting wet, that's an uncut dick. If he's circumcised, I have no clue what's happening, but it just sounds like he's not circumcised.
All the talking over Anita's head by her mens while they're fucking her creeps me out. And in general the sex is so wordy and not in a fun way at all. I think that it's not that there's too much sex in LKH's books, it's that people won't shut the hell up and get on with it.
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Date: 2013-07-04 03:54 am (UTC)Anita talks about how some people just go down on others like a duty or chore
Um what. LKH seems to do this a lot, write about how people treat sex in X bad way but this penis treats it in Y good way. And the reader is obviously supposed to nod and think, "yes, LKH is right, people act like X!" But in every case I've seen, people in my life have never acted like X, so I end up thinking it's a hangup of LKH's.
He stops to tell Asher that "You taste close." Is that something you can actually taste? Precum, I guess, that's a thing, right?
Yeah, but it can happen any time, it doesn't necessarily mean a guy's about to come. "You feel close" or, better, "you sound close" would have made more sense. Though the line is entirely IKEA and shouldn't have been said anyway.
As for Micah getting wet, that's an uncut dick. If he's circumcised, I have no clue what's happening, but it just sounds like he's not circumcised.
All the talking over Anita's head by her mens while they're fucking her creeps me out. And in general the sex is so wordy and not in a fun way at all. I think that it's not that there's too much sex in LKH's books, it's that people won't shut the hell up and get on with it.