If you have people you trust to be honest with your writing, I recommend passing your novel to them before attempting any more re-writing.
"I hadn't changed him; I'd just broken him to my will. Crap."
Anita, are you that fucking ignorant? Does she really believe that Nicky "changed for her" as opposed to her mentally enslaving him? She makes it sound like she believed Nicky made a conscious choice to behave a certain way after meeting Anita. It's ridiculous that she can be so stupid and still be alive.
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Date: 2013-10-20 01:59 pm (UTC)"I hadn't changed him; I'd just broken him to my will. Crap."
Anita, are you that fucking ignorant? Does she really believe that Nicky "changed for her" as opposed to her mentally enslaving him? She makes it sound like she believed Nicky made a conscious choice to behave a certain way after meeting Anita. It's ridiculous that she can be so stupid and still be alive.